I do Songwriting?

Hey people, I actually write songs in real life for fun, and I've actually got them rated recently by a friend and I couldn't believe the average score I got.

8.5

It surprised me, so I thought. Why not show everyone here what I write? That is, if you want to see them?

Sure! Why not? Let's see if your friend was really telling his honest opinion...

Write a song about ink...you heard me.

ye sure i wanna see it ...wat is it about anyway?

Okay since people were wondering what songs I write, I'll let you know, by showing you lot my first ever song.

Demons of my Heart

What can I do?
Against the monster who has you
What can I really do?
Now that I can see my own
Turn their backs on me
Because I couldn’t stop you scream in pain!

(Chorus)
Please forgive me
For not saving you
But I couldn’t stop the demons
The demons of my heart
That stopped my attempts to stop it
My attempts to stop your pain
Please forgive me
For losing to my demons

I never wanted to see this
Once I walked alone
There I saw you flashing
Before my very mind
Screaming at how you hate me
For not stopping your screaming
As I couldn’t stop the pain
Just like that time before
I couldn’t my demons
From slamming you to the floor

(Chorus)
Please forgive me
For not saving you
But I couldn’t stop the demons
The demons of my heart
That stopped my attempts to stop it
My attempts to stop your pain
Please forgive me
For losing to my demons

Please forgive me
For I can not control it
The angry and the bloodlust
That my demons have unleashed
Upon your broken body
Which I could not protect
Now I have to pretend
That this is just a dream
A dream where demons
Are not free!

(Chorus)
Please forgive me
For not saving you
But I couldn’t stop the demons
The demons of my heart
That stopped my attempts to stop it
My attempts to stop your pain
Please forgive me
For losing to my demons

Please stop me killing!
I want to stop this for once!
I don’t know why I can’t stop this
Why my demons are in control!
Please stop my demons
Before this night ends!
Please just kill me now and then!

(Chorus)
Please forgive me
For not saving you
But I couldn’t stop the demons
The demons of my heart
That stopped my attempts to stop it
My attempts to stop your pain
Please forgive me
For losing to my demons

New song. This one is called "Escaping"

I really need to behave
When I come back from home
Even if I don’t want to return
I know that I don’t have a chance
Of escaping

What do people tell you?
What have you done here?
I know that I don’t deserve this
I only need to have a new life
But I don’t have a chance
Of escaping

[Chorus]
I wish that I could change
I never wanted to be this monster
I never wanted to push her away
But now I’m starting to see the truth
That I will never have chance
Of escaping
[End Chorus]

Will you even believe me?
After all that you’re starting to see
But there’s nowhere where you can run
I’ve made sure that there’s no chance
Of escaping

I’ve seen all that I want to see
I’ve seen all that I can believe
But this is something that is crazy!
But I can see something amazing!
And my life won’t have a chance
Of escaping

[Chorus]
I wish that I could change
I never wanted to be this monster
I never wanted to push her away
But now I’m starting to see the truth
That I will never have chance
Of escaping
[End Chorus]

I never wanted these problems
I only wanted a lover
But after my mistake
I blow away my chance of escaping

Nice un'! It took me a little while to see how a beat could fit in, but it seems pretty good.

Write a song about a happy zombie, skipping across a rainbow.

Made a new one called

Weakness

I have a shrine in my room
It’s something that I’ve always had
I never wanted to believe
But after all I’ve seen
I wonder where you’ve been

There is something you’re hiding
I wish I knew what I could find
I’ve always watched the clouds
It’s something that keeps me calm
I don’t want to tell you
About my weakness

[Chorus]
I see all the needles in your skin
And the pain that you’re in
But I turn away everytime I see
You showing your weakness
To me and the world
[End Chorus]

I wonder what I did today
To cause you to cry today
I never truly understand
The way the human mind works
I don’t understand the weakness

I don’t want to give up
I don’t want to give in
I wonder why I want to cry
Why do I think of my pain
When I’m showing my weakness

[Chorus]
I see all the needles in your skin
And the pain that you’re in
But I turn away everytime I see
You showing your weakness
To me and the world
[End Chorus]

There is something that is painful to see
But it’s nothing more than a disease
I will never truly understand
What it means to be
Showing your weakness

People I believe I have written a song for our Sunday nights
Check it out

Devastation

Can you see the fires
That are roaring up high
After what we caused
In this painful world
With these dangers

You will see what you need
And that is simple
What you need is fame and glory
And to become the king of the world
After all the destruction
You should know what it’s like

[Chorus]
Devastation!
Everyone’s caused it
Pain and destruction!
Everyone feels it
Fame and glory!
Everyone wants it
This is what causes devastation!
[End Chorus]

Winning a match is not enough
Being a champion is something better
We all want to be a champion
Winning a Tag Title causes bonding
We are completely Prestige
And we know it
Winning with Pride is what we need to do
Winning a World Title makes you enemies
And everyone knows it

[Chorus]
Devastation!
Everyone’s caused it
Pain and destruction!
Everyone feels it
Fame and glory!
Everyone wants it
This is what causes devastation!
[End Chorus]

We will want a bit of glory and fame
I know that you will need it
Cause we are part of the Devastation

I like "Weakness" - after reading it some times, it reminds me of some songs of "Three Days Grace" (well, its main content and messages - listen to "Pain" and "It's all Over", maybe...).

I don't have any feeling for rhyme schemes and such, so I cannot say anything about that, but I can say something about the lyric and content - I do write short stories in my free time and already got one published in a book, so I cannot be THAT bad
(sorry, they are in german... Will have to look if I have ever written something in english that you can show to people )

I can imagine "Devastation" VERY easily as a metal song!

made a new one completely out of the blue yea, so hope you enjoy reading it yea

Messages

Can you hear my voice?
Do you really have a choice?
You don’t need to know
The truth in my lies

I’ve always been on msn
You always asked how I am
You don’t understand
Just how sick that I truly am
I could easily play with your heart
But there’s no time to depart

You’ve never seen my face
I’ve never seen your voice
You wish you could forget my voice
I wish I could to forget your face

Messages can be dangerous thing
I never open my junk mail
If I ever open my junk mail
I would see your messages
And I just want to forget your face
It’s a disgrace to the human race

I never wanted an attachment
I couldn’t see what you believed in
It is something I could never be
And that is a regretful man
Well I’m going to start a band

There is something that you know
Now that I have your attention
I must tell you the truth
That I was never simple
I know more things
Than you could imagine

I never wanted to see you
I could never believe you
There are some things
That are not worth it
So I must finally say goodbye
After all my message is simply this
Life is a complete and utter bitch

My latest song

Inside Her

I always watch her at school
When she’s having fun
But it doesn’t really matter
I’m never gonna get my way
Even if I admit my reasons
Cause all I’ve got is my dreams

[Chorus]
Cause I can do whatever I want here
I can make her see my way
And I could taste her lips
And I’m gonna be deep inside her
And it’s gonna make her scream
And I’ll just wake up after that dream
[End Chorus]

I always smiled at her at school
When she looked my way
But I knew she didn’t care
I was never gonna get my way
Even if I try to explain
After all I only need my dreams

[Chorus]
Cause I can do whatever I want here
I can make her see my way
And I could taste her lips
And I’m gonna be deep inside her
And it’s gonna make her scream
And I’ll just wake up after that dream
[End Chorus]

I wish I could see her smile at me
Cause I only see her frown at me
But I know she doesn’t even like me
I will never get me way with her
Even if I tried
But all I really need are my dreams

[Chorus]
Cause I can do whatever I want here
I can make her see my way
And I could taste her lips
And I’m gonna be deep inside her
And it’s gonna make her scream
And I’ll just wake up after that dream
[End Chorus]