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James Young Hall of Famer
Number of posts : 399 Age : 32 Location : England Registration date : 2008-08-11
| Subject: I do Songwriting? Tue Apr 07, 2009 10:54 pm | |
| Hey people, I actually write songs in real life for fun, and I've actually got them rated recently by a friend and I couldn't believe the average score I got.
8.5
It surprised me, so I thought. Why not show everyone here what I write? That is, if you want to see them? | |
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el cartographer Hall of Famer
Number of posts : 237 Location : Texas, USA Registration date : 2008-11-27
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Wed Apr 08, 2009 12:48 am | |
| Sure! Why not? Let's see if your friend was really telling his honest opinion... | |
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Snake Title Challenger
Number of posts : 67 Registration date : 2009-02-01
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Wed Apr 08, 2009 10:26 am | |
| Write a song about ink...you heard me. | |
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James Young Hall of Famer
Number of posts : 399 Age : 32 Location : England Registration date : 2008-08-11
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Wed Apr 08, 2009 11:50 am | |
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freelancer Main Eventer
Number of posts : 145 Age : 30 Location : liverpool,england Registration date : 2008-08-10
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Wed Apr 08, 2009 2:53 pm | |
| ye sure i wanna see it ...wat is it about anyway? | |
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James Young Hall of Famer
Number of posts : 399 Age : 32 Location : England Registration date : 2008-08-11
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Wed Apr 08, 2009 5:27 pm | |
| Okay since people were wondering what songs I write, I'll let you know, by showing you lot my first ever song.
Demons of my Heart
What can I do? Against the monster who has you What can I really do? Now that I can see my own Turn their backs on me Because I couldn’t stop you scream in pain!
(Chorus) Please forgive me For not saving you But I couldn’t stop the demons The demons of my heart That stopped my attempts to stop it My attempts to stop your pain Please forgive me For losing to my demons
I never wanted to see this Once I walked alone There I saw you flashing Before my very mind Screaming at how you hate me For not stopping your screaming As I couldn’t stop the pain Just like that time before I couldn’t my demons From slamming you to the floor
(Chorus) Please forgive me For not saving you But I couldn’t stop the demons The demons of my heart That stopped my attempts to stop it My attempts to stop your pain Please forgive me For losing to my demons
Please forgive me For I can not control it The angry and the bloodlust That my demons have unleashed Upon your broken body Which I could not protect Now I have to pretend That this is just a dream A dream where demons Are not free!
(Chorus) Please forgive me For not saving you But I couldn’t stop the demons The demons of my heart That stopped my attempts to stop it My attempts to stop your pain Please forgive me For losing to my demons
Please stop me killing! I want to stop this for once! I don’t know why I can’t stop this Why my demons are in control! Please stop my demons Before this night ends! Please just kill me now and then!
(Chorus) Please forgive me For not saving you But I couldn’t stop the demons The demons of my heart That stopped my attempts to stop it My attempts to stop your pain Please forgive me For losing to my demons | |
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James Young Hall of Famer
Number of posts : 399 Age : 32 Location : England Registration date : 2008-08-11
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Fri May 22, 2009 10:44 pm | |
| New song. This one is called "Escaping"
I really need to behave When I come back from home Even if I don’t want to return I know that I don’t have a chance Of escaping
What do people tell you? What have you done here? I know that I don’t deserve this I only need to have a new life But I don’t have a chance Of escaping
[Chorus] I wish that I could change I never wanted to be this monster I never wanted to push her away But now I’m starting to see the truth That I will never have chance Of escaping [End Chorus]
Will you even believe me? After all that you’re starting to see But there’s nowhere where you can run I’ve made sure that there’s no chance Of escaping
I’ve seen all that I want to see I’ve seen all that I can believe But this is something that is crazy! But I can see something amazing! And my life won’t have a chance Of escaping
[Chorus] I wish that I could change I never wanted to be this monster I never wanted to push her away But now I’m starting to see the truth That I will never have chance Of escaping [End Chorus]
I never wanted these problems I only wanted a lover But after my mistake I blow away my chance of escaping | |
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el cartographer Hall of Famer
Number of posts : 237 Location : Texas, USA Registration date : 2008-11-27
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Fri May 22, 2009 11:58 pm | |
| Nice un'! It took me a little while to see how a beat could fit in, but it seems pretty good. | |
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Captain Howdy (Nancy) Title Challenger
Number of posts : 127 Age : 33 Location : Round Rock, Texas Registration date : 2009-01-16
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Sat May 23, 2009 5:28 pm | |
| Write a song about a happy zombie, skipping across a rainbow. | |
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James Young Hall of Famer
Number of posts : 399 Age : 32 Location : England Registration date : 2008-08-11
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Sat May 30, 2009 12:17 am | |
| Made a new one called
Weakness
I have a shrine in my room It’s something that I’ve always had I never wanted to believe But after all I’ve seen I wonder where you’ve been
There is something you’re hiding I wish I knew what I could find I’ve always watched the clouds It’s something that keeps me calm I don’t want to tell you About my weakness
[Chorus] I see all the needles in your skin And the pain that you’re in But I turn away everytime I see You showing your weakness To me and the world [End Chorus]
I wonder what I did today To cause you to cry today I never truly understand The way the human mind works I don’t understand the weakness
I don’t want to give up I don’t want to give in I wonder why I want to cry Why do I think of my pain When I’m showing my weakness
[Chorus] I see all the needles in your skin And the pain that you’re in But I turn away everytime I see You showing your weakness To me and the world [End Chorus]
There is something that is painful to see But it’s nothing more than a disease I will never truly understand What it means to be Showing your weakness | |
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James Young Hall of Famer
Number of posts : 399 Age : 32 Location : England Registration date : 2008-08-11
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Tue Jun 02, 2009 10:01 pm | |
| People I believe I have written a song for our Sunday nights Check it out
Devastation
Can you see the fires That are roaring up high After what we caused In this painful world With these dangers
You will see what you need And that is simple What you need is fame and glory And to become the king of the world After all the destruction You should know what it’s like
[Chorus] Devastation! Everyone’s caused it Pain and destruction! Everyone feels it Fame and glory! Everyone wants it This is what causes devastation! [End Chorus]
Winning a match is not enough Being a champion is something better We all want to be a champion Winning a Tag Title causes bonding We are completely Prestige And we know it Winning with Pride is what we need to do Winning a World Title makes you enemies And everyone knows it
[Chorus] Devastation! Everyone’s caused it Pain and destruction! Everyone feels it Fame and glory! Everyone wants it This is what causes devastation! [End Chorus]
We will want a bit of glory and fame I know that you will need it Cause we are part of the Devastation | |
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Kaluani VGM
Number of posts : 639 Registration date : 2008-08-07
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Tue Jun 02, 2009 10:10 pm | |
| I like "Weakness" - after reading it some times, it reminds me of some songs of "Three Days Grace" (well, its main content and messages - listen to "Pain" and "It's all Over", maybe...). I don't have any feeling for rhyme schemes and such, so I cannot say anything about that, but I can say something about the lyric and content - I do write short stories in my free time and already got one published in a book, so I cannot be THAT bad (sorry, they are in german... Will have to look if I have ever written something in english that you can show to people ) | |
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el cartographer Hall of Famer
Number of posts : 237 Location : Texas, USA Registration date : 2008-11-27
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Wed Jun 03, 2009 2:28 am | |
| I can imagine "Devastation" VERY easily as a metal song! | |
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James Young Hall of Famer
Number of posts : 399 Age : 32 Location : England Registration date : 2008-08-11
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Wed Jun 10, 2009 12:03 am | |
| made a new one completely out of the blue yea, so hope you enjoy reading it yea
Messages
Can you hear my voice? Do you really have a choice? You don’t need to know The truth in my lies
I’ve always been on msn You always asked how I am You don’t understand Just how sick that I truly am I could easily play with your heart But there’s no time to depart
You’ve never seen my face I’ve never seen your voice You wish you could forget my voice I wish I could to forget your face
Messages can be dangerous thing I never open my junk mail If I ever open my junk mail I would see your messages And I just want to forget your face It’s a disgrace to the human race
I never wanted an attachment I couldn’t see what you believed in It is something I could never be And that is a regretful man Well I’m going to start a band
There is something that you know Now that I have your attention I must tell you the truth That I was never simple I know more things Than you could imagine
I never wanted to see you I could never believe you There are some things That are not worth it So I must finally say goodbye After all my message is simply this Life is a complete and utter bitch | |
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James Young Hall of Famer
Number of posts : 399 Age : 32 Location : England Registration date : 2008-08-11
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Wed Jun 10, 2009 10:50 pm | |
| My latest song
Inside Her
I always watch her at school When she’s having fun But it doesn’t really matter I’m never gonna get my way Even if I admit my reasons Cause all I’ve got is my dreams
[Chorus] Cause I can do whatever I want here I can make her see my way And I could taste her lips And I’m gonna be deep inside her And it’s gonna make her scream And I’ll just wake up after that dream [End Chorus]
I always smiled at her at school When she looked my way But I knew she didn’t care I was never gonna get my way Even if I try to explain After all I only need my dreams
[Chorus] Cause I can do whatever I want here I can make her see my way And I could taste her lips And I’m gonna be deep inside her And it’s gonna make her scream And I’ll just wake up after that dream [End Chorus]
I wish I could see her smile at me Cause I only see her frown at me But I know she doesn’t even like me I will never get me way with her Even if I tried But all I really need are my dreams
[Chorus] Cause I can do whatever I want here I can make her see my way And I could taste her lips And I’m gonna be deep inside her And it’s gonna make her scream And I’ll just wake up after that dream [End Chorus] | |
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James Young Hall of Famer
Number of posts : 399 Age : 32 Location : England Registration date : 2008-08-11
| Subject: Re: I do Songwriting? Thu Jun 11, 2009 11:06 pm | |
| This is a song that I wanted to make for us
My Goodbye
Have you ever wondered why We have to leave Are we gonna get the last ride home? There are some things That I want to achieve But I never have enough time
Hey! Wait! I need to say this line! After all your advice I need to say Hey! Wait! I need to say this line! After all their advice I have one thing to say Hey! Wait! I need to say this line! I have to say my goodbye My goodbye
I never wanted this all to end After all our fun We’ve been locked inside our little game I just wish it never had to end But in the end It could never truly last
Hey! Wait! I need to say this line! After all your advice I need to say Hey! Wait! I need to say this line! After all their advice I have one thing to say Hey! Wait! I need to say this line! I have to say my goodbye My goodbye
When will we play this game again? After all the time we’ve been made I just wish I could be here again So we could start our game again After all this time I want to create a new cancer So we could continue our little game
Hey! Wait! I need to say this line! After all your advice I need to say Hey! Wait! I need to say this line! After all their advice I have one thing to say Hey! Wait! I need to say this line! I have to say my goodbye My goodbye My goodbye My goodbye My goodbye | |
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